5月13日雅思大作文范文分析

2017-05-16编辑: 长安来自: 环球教育

  5月13日的这场雅思写作考试,和四月底的考试如出一辙。大作文简单到爆,小作文居然还是地图。严重怀疑出题考官前几天回家走丢了,因此对地图情有独钟。本次考试的大作文题目,其实和2016年08月13号考题几乎一样,故而无太高难度可言。


  环球教育杨亮老师分析原题如下:

  In some countries, it is possible for people to have a variety of food transported from all over the world. To what extent do you think its advantages outweigh its disadvantages? 20170513

  典型的优缺点对比题型。开头段还是背景介绍和点题。

  In this day and age, thanks to the highly developed technology of transportation and extensive trade of food, people's diet has become abundant unprecedentedly. Notwithstanding, optimists and pessimists to this issue still have conflicting views on people's enjoying the food transported for thousands of miles.

  主段一,强调长距离运送这些食物的好处。

  Merits of this situation are fairly apparent. Transporting food from one region to another demands human resources working as logistics, naturally creating more working opportunities regionally, and in the meantime local economy can definitely be boosted by food trade. Besides, another positive consequence of local high employment rate and economic prosperity is that diet of people in another region is substantially enriched.

  主段二,让步段,反驳了一个坏处,既长距离运送可能会产生环境污染。让步段,通常不会出现在主段二的位置。本文如此安排,是因为主段三还是让步段。

  People with adverse standpoints believe that long-distance transportation of food undoubtedly harms environment via carbon emission. Eventually, fuel switching and mass transport are two effective methods to deal with the destruction of environment. Transporting massive food by vehicles powered by clean energy like electric rail with reasonable freight traffic plan can extremely minimize environmental cost.

  主段三,继续一个让步段。反驳了另外一个缺点,即长距离运输可能会因此导致添加剂滥用。实则在监管之下,这不是问题。

  Simultaneously, another possibly negative outcome is that some people worry about excessive use of preservatives commonly and widely utilized for storing and transporting food. In fact, primarily modern transportation technology is able to considerably reduce the time cost of shipping food from one region to another. (Most of Chinese living in major cities may have the experience of eating some fresh fruit in the evening that were picked up in the morning from some orchards 2 or 3 thousand miles away.) In addition, usage of preservatives is usually strictly regulated by laws in order to ensure the food safety.

  由上文论证可知,这件事情好处一堆,坏处都可以解决。故而,这是一件大快人心的事情。结尾阐明笔者观点。

  To sum up, what people need to do is enjoying the ample diet without worrying overly about destruction of environment and issues of food safety that some people think might be caused by long-distance transportation of food.

  通常而言,全文只出现一个让步段,这样结构清晰简单。但是,本文另辟蹊径用了两个让步段,其实逻辑上没有太大变化。

  成文仓促,必有不足,期待斧正。

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