5月20日雅思大作文范文分析

2017-05-27编辑: 长安来自: 环球教育

  本周的考题,算是媒体类的一个老面孔。三番五次地出现在考试中。有过良好备考经历的考生对此应该不算陌生。既然是老生常谈的题目了,传统的写法就不赘述了。下文独辟蹊径,拆解一下这个文章诸多写法中的一种。

  很有可能,各位在读到下面这篇文章的时候会略感和之前大家读到的雅思作文稍有不同。环球教育杨亮老师初衷就是写一下可能和大部分文章不同的东西,给各位考生在漫长而沉闷的备考路上一次难得的仔细思考的机会。


  原题如下:

  The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to decrease the level of violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree. 20170520

  审题时,着重了amount一词,后文也正是抓住了这个关键词来行文。

  Undoubtedly, violence shown by media might do harm to the public especially some teenagers, whereby causing violent crimes to some extent in our society. However, controlling the amount of violence in media by governments is not the key for this problem, whereas it is just a perfunctory method that can never solve this problem thoroughly.

  开头段,先是确定了一个背景,那就是媒体中的暴力就是有害,这是常识。但是控制媒体中暴力的数量,并不是问题的关键。此处也表达清楚了笔者就此题的观点。

  Primarily, reducing the amount of violence broadcasted by media cannot avoid detailed description of violence which can be seen as the key factor leaving negative impression and imparting harmful information to the public. A 90-minute film may merely contain 3-minute violent plots which are bloody enough that all viewers will remember this for a long time. Some viewers of this movie will, unquestionably, be impacted adversely by what they saw. Accordingly, the level of violent crimes in our society is not able to be decreased by reducing the amount of violence in media.

  首段重点阐述一个观点,既是控制了数量避免不了对于暴力细节的描述。因此,这么做是无用功。

  Additionally, restraining the amount of violence in media cannot guarantee the information they show about violence is appropriate to the masses. Movies and some TV programs tend to shape heroes who defy laws and who answer violence with violence in order to win a better box office. Those outlaws should have been punished by laws, but they become legendary figures on screens. The distorted values mislead people to believe that violence is what they should rely on rather than laws while facing some difficulties in their life. By analogy, there is no immediate causality between less violence in media and lower level of violent crimes.

  主段二,从另一角度出发,说明控制暴力的数量不能保证关于暴力的信息是正确的价值导向。少量的暴力描述但是夹杂着错误的价值观,那么一样可以有大危害。

  In conclusion, for lowering the level of violent crimes in our society, what governments should do is far more than controlling how much violence media can show. Instead, how media broadcast violent information is what governments ought to pay more attention to.

  由于,两个主段都是不同意题干的观点,因此结论出再次表明了笔者的否定立场。结论是控制暴力信息的数量是没有用的,重点应该是控制媒体们怎么报道和播出这些暴力信息。

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