来源:环球教育教研中心
小编:环球教育教研中心 942015年9月5日托福写作回忆+解析
环球教育 苏州学校
朱丁琦 整理点评
综合点评 | ||
本次考试的综合写作较为简单,基本与之前难度持平。动物类与生物类话题是综合写作中的常见话题, 考生要多多练习此类型话题的题目,推荐TPO4 和TPO26。 此次综合写作的话题与托福阅读TPO30(Role of Play in Development)相重合,考生可以仔细阅读一下。并且建议考生在参加考试前一定要多多刷题,融汇贯通其中的内容。 | ||
综合写作 | ||
话题分类 | 动物类话题 | |
考题回忆 | 总论点 | 为什么动物小时候需要玩耍 |
阅读部分 | 文章指出动物的玩耍是有正面意义的,是为了长大之后能够很好生存。第一个理由是因为有多余的能量必须用掉所以要玩。第二个理由是这是instinct—practice,动物在以后为了生存而锻炼的。比如捕食。第三个理由是玩耍是为了培养社交能力,用老鼠举例
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听力部分 | 听力里的教授认为三个解释都是错的,第一点举young seal的例子,幼崽待在那儿等母亲喂食,所以没有过多的能量吸收,但还是玩耍;第二点说对某些动物,玩耍不能帮助其生存。提到了一个关于猫的研究,好像有两个组。玩耍的那个组的猫没有表现出更有技巧,不是更好的捕猎者。第三点说老鼠老了以后仍能建立社会关系,也就是说玩耍对于建立社会关系不是必要的。 | |
解题思路 | 在进行综合写作时,虽然阅读文章会在听力结束后再次出现,但是并不意味着不要阅读文章,实际上应该更多地将阅读中的内容转换成有用信息,不仅要预测听力中的内容还要将阅读中的一些生词积累,不打无把握的仗。
推荐使用模板写作 In the lecture, the professor made several points about ...... .the professor argues that..... However, the reading passage contends that ......The professor's lecture casts doubt on the reading by using a number of point that are contrary to.... Contrary to the belief in the passage that …the professor says that… because… The professor also points out that… According to the reading passage,. However, the professor holds the different opinion, which is that… The professor refutes the viewpoint showed in the passage that… by saying that… So the lecturer has totally different ideas on the topics made in the passage. | |
参考范文 | The professor actually contradicts the statements made in the passage. He claims that the purpose of playing is not for future learning but for fun.
First, the professor contradicts the issue in the reading passage that animals consume extra energy via playing due to their incapacity of energy management. He supports his idea by presenting the example of young seals who have less energy before their mother brings back foods but still like to play.
Second, the lecturer illustrates a research conducted by scientists in which two groups of cats were tested separately. One group of rats was taught how to play when they were young while another group was not. The results turned that none of them were skilled at hunting. The reading passage, however, states an instinct practice theory and indicates that animals practice hunting skills during playing.
Third, the speaker argues that after long term observations, it can be finally proved that rats can still develop social skills even after they are mature, which directly contradicts to the idea in the reading that they have to develop relationship with other members by playing.
Thus it can be inferred that the professor challenges the passage by giving reasons as to why he thinks that animals do not play for future development. | |
独立写作 | ||
话题分类 | 旅游类 | |
考题回忆 | In order to attract more tourists, government should improve the safety by hiring more police or improve the appearance by improving the old buildings and streets.
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解题思路 | 建议写成两面倒 论点:雇佣更多的警察和改进旧建筑对于吸引游客一样重要 第一段:雇佣更多警察会让社会更安定,使得商人愿意做生意,举办各种活动,从而吸引游客 第二段:改善老建筑外貌会让避免破旧的建筑物带来危害,更可以让喜欢新奇的游客观赏到新面貌 第三段:个人观点表达,二者并不矛盾,取决于怎样合理分配资源 结论:两种手段一样重要 | |
参考范文 | With the booming of mass tourism, how to raise revenue through growing tourism has been the priority for most metropolitan authorities. Some of them believe that improving historical sites and streets can help them achieve this end while those who lay more stress on safety firmly hold the idea that hiring more police force is more important. For me, yet, it is a little bit haste to say that it is better to hire more police force than to better historical buildings in order to appeal more tourists.
On the one hand, recruiting more policemen not only can bring a sense of security for tourists traveling to international destinations, but also encourages travelers to spend more time on shopping. First, safety has always been the topmost consideration for the most travelers。Rarely do we see that a majority of tourists do not give up their traveling plans to the beautiful regions due to the safety concern. Increasing the number of police patrolling on streets can create an atmosphere of security for regions that have been suffering from the impression of lack of security in the past. In addition, strengthening the police force can also benefit the economy of tourists destinations enormously. Once those tourists for sightseeing feel security during their trip, they certainly would like to extend their staying in the place to experience the traditional cultures as well as purchasing souvenirs and gifts for their friends and families, which boosts the economy of the local area.
On the other hand, bettering the historical buildings avoids potential risks of collapse and allows easier access to the tourists resorts. Those historical sites, especially those who have stood for hundreds or even thousands of years, including Great Wall and Pyramid, have been suffering from long-term strike from nature. If no measures have been taken to better the situation, some accidents, which are often seen than not the case, would occur. Imagine if you take a traveling there, are you willing to take the risks? Moreover, it always takes time for the travelers to arrive some tourists attractions, especially those locating in remote areas due to the inconvenience of access. It is not hard to imagine that once the streets have been fixed, how much time would be saved on road, which is certainly what the travelers expect.
From my own perspective, there is no contradiction between each statement. For those tourist sites which have been troubled by severe theft and robbery problems, it is a wise choice to hire more policemen to improve the security as well as to raise the image of the city. For those historical sites, of course, more emphasis should be laid on building reconstruction and street improvement.
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